I always enjoy reading anything Yu-gi-oh! GX related, and I have to say that this is an refreshing and original way to start a story off. I really find it new and different that you started the story where chronologically, it would have been in the middle of season four, rather than in the beginning of the anime. I also find the idea of a male student, whom I'm assuming is your OC, staying in the girl's Obelisk-Blue Dormitory, to be an interesting way to go, especially since it sounded like Jaden said that Kite doesn't really like being around people, and in particular, girls.
I definitely encourage you to keep writing! Have you thought about progressing the story further, or is this just a little experiment to see if people respond well to it?